hey,,,,gud job done bro!!,,,The intial part was able to pull up the readers interest but there was extensive used of the word "I". I feel d sentence could be framed in a much better way. The 2nd n 3rd part was the more interesting, it kept me engrossed as the story was moving ahead. As goin ahead wit episode 4, the interest level was coming down, the subject matter n situation described should have been well structured to retain the curiosity n interst of the reader.
overall excellent writing,,, hope my comment wud have fueled ur pen,,,,i m anxious to know wat happened next,,,so plz post ur 5 episode soon,,,
I loved the small twists. For eg in Episode 1, suddenly realizing that they were playing counter strike.
Its hard to believe that someone in Engineering college doesn't know what masturbation is and he is taught that kisses don’t cause babies. Cmon thats awfully ridiculous.
The style of writing though is such that it will keep the readers interested. After the end of each episode you would definitely want to know what happens in the next.
In the story, I think this guy ABC is far more good at heart than Neil. Neil thinks he is smarter and whatever good ABC does, he takes credit for that and ABC is held responsible for whatever mistakes he makes especially in the context of girls.
This girl Naina I suspect is someone who isnt good for ABC who is flattered by her good looks. She seems to be someone who will dump her for another guy. Lets see.. what happens.. I am waiting for the next episode.
@srk: Naina will dump ABC??? You are going by facts it seems!!!...it's fiction though...and ya...ABC is any day better at heart than Niel (in this story :P)
@satz: thaks man...for adding fuel...n I truly hope you wd enjoy episode 5 more than 4. Fingers crossed.
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hey,,,,gud job done bro!!,,,The intial part was able to pull up the readers interest but there was extensive used of the word "I". I feel d sentence could be framed in a much better way. The 2nd n 3rd part was the more interesting, it kept me engrossed as the story was moving ahead. As goin ahead wit episode 4, the interest level was coming down, the subject matter n situation described should have been well structured to retain the curiosity n interst of the reader.
overall excellent writing,,, hope my comment wud have fueled ur pen,,,,i m anxious to know wat happened next,,,so plz post ur 5 episode soon,,,
I loved the small twists. For eg in Episode 1, suddenly realizing that they were playing counter strike.
Its hard to believe that someone in Engineering college doesn't know what masturbation is and he is taught that kisses don’t cause babies. Cmon thats awfully ridiculous.
The style of writing though is such that it will keep the readers interested. After the end of each episode you would definitely want to know what happens in the next.
In the story, I think this guy ABC is far more good at heart than Neil. Neil thinks he is smarter and whatever good ABC does, he takes credit for that and ABC is held responsible for whatever mistakes he makes especially in the context of girls.
This girl Naina I suspect is someone who isnt good for ABC who is flattered by her good looks.
She seems to be someone who will dump her for another guy. Lets see.. what happens.. I am waiting for the next episode.
@srk: Naina will dump ABC??? You are going by facts it seems!!!...it's fiction though...and ya...ABC is any day better at heart than Niel (in this story :P)
@satz: thaks man...for adding fuel...n I truly hope you wd enjoy episode 5 more than 4. Fingers crossed.
well done bc... its 4.00 am ind mrng... n m determined to complete this one !!!
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